Sophronia Carrington

[sophronia]

Name:Sophronia Carrington
Year:2
Houses (In order from most liked to least liked):
*Gryffindor
*Ravenclaw
*Hufflepuff
*Slytherin
Blood:Half Veela

Appearance (1+ paragraphs):
Sophronia, most people call her Ron,has light brown hair . She loves to be outside so she is very strong and active . Sophronia spends most of her time with people . She is a people person . Ron is very beautiful considering the she is half veela . She weighs 100 lbs . Sophronia's height is 5'11 . Ron has delicate skin but really doesn't care . Her skin burns very easily but when it does, the burn fades to a tan .
Personality (1+ paragraphs):
Sophronia is fun, very brave, and many people say that she has a lot of nerve . Sophronia isn't afraid to stand up for what she believes in . She is funny rather popular . She has came from a rich family so at times she is a little snobby . She won't stand to be picked on . She will always tries to treat people they way they treat her . Sophronia doesn't really care a lot about the rules . I mean the rules are made to be broken right ? Ron loves new places for one reason . Unexplored . Ron loves to explore . Everywhere she has been has been explored very throughly .
History/Background (2+ paragraphs):
Sophronia( i will call her Ron for awhile) can for a rich family in France . She was adopted by the Carringtons which treated her like a queen . After about 10 years of being spoiled, The Carringtons found out the Ron was a veela . Half veela.The second that they heard, they got her a veela trainer . A trainer helps veelas act very civil, polite and helps them keep their tempers down . Ron made good friends with her trainer .
In France Ron got very bored of being limited to the wizarding world in France . So wanting to please her, Ron's father Jason Carrington,got her books all about Muggles . She learned everything about them . Then her Father gave Ron muggle money . Ron was no longer limited to the Wizarding world in France . Ron got a little annoyed when Muggle boys were always around her . But other then that Ron loved the muggle world . After a while she developed a crush on a muggle boy . Her parents forbid it but Ron didnt care .
Family:
Mother: Isabelle Carrington
Father: Jason Carrington
Sister:Gabrielle Carrington
Likes (3+):
Quidditch
DADA
having fun
boys
Dislikes (3+):
Mean people
getting picked on
Potions
exams
Hobbies (3+):
Quidditch
reading
Hanging out with her friends
flirting
Sample RP:
Ron glided through the Enchanted Woods, feeling the magic in the air and the magic in her heart . She hummed the tune of a song that made her feel like a star, the beat matched with the beat of her heart. The woods are soo beautiful, she thought . It was the only thought that occupied her mind at the moment, and she welcomed the warm feeling he gave her . "Come to me..." Ron whispered to the empty air . She looked up, seeing no moon in the sky, the sliver it had been the night before now gone . She sat down on a lonely stone bench shrouded by vines and flowers, crossing her legs and looking out at the midnight sky .

[Kaylee Malfoy]

Please use the template I have provided. It is very hard to read when the subjects are not in bold.

[Ava Callahan]

Hmm. This application needs a lot of work.

1. First of all, NEVER post in the plot planning sections until you're accepted. That's just rude.

2. Every section needs to be elaborated on. You simply don't have enough appearance, history, personality or RP sample.

3. She sounds a bit like a Mary-Sue. Think you could add more flaws to her personality?

4. Don't put a space between the last word of a sentence and the period. It's harder to read, and it's not grammatically correct.

Sorry to be so critical [or blunt, to put it one way], but we want this site to be the best it can be.


Edit by Kaylee: I agree.